Hello! I love the personification of “freckles.” Maybe you could come up with a better description for her hair, though. I feel as if comparing someone’s gold hair to the sun is a bit overused. The whole thing is simple and sweet, though, and I like that. It would also be nice if you expanded upon those three sentences and developed the poem more, just to give it a little more depth.
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