"As I slipped my foot into the gaping mouth of my shoe, / gripping the indifferent wood of the door to my right, / I realized it was all for nothing. / Stability slept with the whim of the breeze / and the will of the door to withstand it. / I was irrelevant because / I deemed you irrelevant." I just wrote this. thoughts?

I love the imagery of “gaping mouth of my shoe” and how you personify the wood as being indifferent. I like that idea. And the last two lines- “I was irrelevant because/I deemed you irrelevant” are really unique. Sometimes if you end each line with the same word it can sound strange, but the way you wrote it makes it work really well. I could definitely see what you just wrote being in a poetry book. Keep writing!